i am the joey
breathing in my dead mother’s
pouch
Bee Jay
Bee Jay says:
“Sometimes a haiku can take years of thought and revisions. Sometimes one pops out seemingly fully formed. This haiku came out of me suddenly after I spent a few weeks reading experimental haiku and Japanese gendai on social media and in journals such as Heliosparrow, is/let, and Otoroshi.
I placed my fresh haiku into a workshop group to gauge responses and to see how I could improve it, but despite the sentence structure and the personification/anthropomorphism, the reaction to it was very positive, including a surprising request from Alan Summers to submit it to his new journal.”
one favourite haiku and why
I compiled a list of 30 of my fave contemporary haiku and then selected Susan Burch's haiku out of that.
washed jeans―
his love note
still dirty
Susan Burch
Honourable Mention 4th Annual Senryu Contest,
Sonic Boom July 2018
Bee Jay says:
“In 2014, Susan Burch was one of the first poets to write constructive comments and expert advice on my haiku and she later gave me the confidence to begin submitting my work. Her haiku and senryu often move me and this one is one of my faves.
In this poem I see a fresh, new romance where lust and passion colours everything and even the most simple sentence contains sexual innuendo. I can imagine the kinds of words written in that note. The jeans could be hers or his but I prefer to think they’re hers. The love note is ‘still’ dirty which makes me believe she’s read it before.
On the other hand, there is also the possibility that this is a dark poem about an illicit love affair and that she finds this dirty note in his jeans. This kind of ambiguity is one I admire in a haiku, I luv the idea that a haiku can be seen as positive in one reading and then so negative in another.”
favourite quote from Waiting for Godot
“There's no lack of void.”
Withnail and I
“Give me a Valium, I'm getting the fear.”
Alan note:
Also enjoy my own commentary, as the contest judge, on Susan Burch’s haikai verse:
“Being Human - the ordinary intensity”
a look at senryu
https://area17.blogspot.com/2018/06/being-human-ordinary-intensity-look-at.html
